2007年12月6日 星期四
12/3
My cousin came to visit me on Monday afternoon. We planed to play basketball but there were no any vacant basketball court. Then we borrowed two badminton rackets and a shuttlecock from the sports center and went to school gym. My cousin is younger than I for 2 months so we were classmates in junior high school. After we graduated, we seldom meet each other. We not only played badminton but also talked about career in the future that day. In fact, he is a fireman already. After that, I took him to night market and we finished our dinner there. Finally, I took him to train station. He must go back Tao- Yuan for work. Both of us hope that we can see each other soon.
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"We planed to play basketball". This is the kind of error that proves one cannot rely on a spell-checker to find all one's spelling mistakes. "Planed" is a different English word from "planned". To have discovered this spelling mistake, you would have had to have read your post carefully at least once. You apparently did not.
"there were no any vacant basketball court" is not idiomatic or grammatically correct English. It has to be "there were not any vacant basketball courts" at worst, but, better is "there weren't any vacant basketball courts".
"My cousin is younger than I for 2 months" is a syntax and usage problem. I has to be "My cousin is 2 months younger than I am". In spoken English, "younger than me" is idiomatic, but on English tests, it should be "I" instead of "me" if that is the choice given you. When you write, it's better to include the copula "am" so that you get "younger than I am". This makes the sentence less stiff and formal.
Verb tense problem: "After we graduated, we seldom meet each other." The verb has to be "met", or else the sentence has to be "Since we graduated, we seldom meet each other".
"talked about career in the future that day" is not idiomatic or natural English. It should be "talked about our future careers". "That day" is unnecessary because it is redundant.
"and we finished our dinner there" is a strange way of putting it. You don't say anywhere before these words that you had begun your dinner somewhere other than the night market, so this should be "and we ate our dinner there".
"He had to go back" is the proper and idiomatic past tense of must these days. In the 19th and early twentieth centuries, "must" was both past and present tense, but no longer.
"can see each other again soon" is more natural.
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