2007年11月23日 星期五
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I went home on Saturday morning. After lunch, my father took mother and me to Dong-Shih Park. The park is near the sea so sea breeze is strong there. There is full of visitors on the weekend. When I got off the car, I saw many kites in sky. It has been a long time since I flew a kite last time. And some teachers played dodge ball with students on the beach. The sun was shining, and the nice weather made me feel relaxed and delighted. We just took a walk around the park and then left for Bu-Dai Market. The market is also near the sea and the seafood there is fresh. My father bought some sashimi for dinner and we went home before sunset.
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"The park is near the sea so sea breeze is strong there." Although this sentence is clear and understandable, it should look like this: "The park is near the sea, so the sea breeze is strong there."
"There is full of visitors" is not at all natural English. It has to be "The park is full of visitors".
One never gets off a car or a truck, only a boat, plane, bus, motorbike, bicycle, or train. One gets out of a car or truck.
"It has been a long time since I flew a kite last time." "last time" is both unnecessary and incorrect here.
The next sentence should not begin with "and". That connects the content of that sentence with the previous one, but they are absolutely unconnected. That should be obvious.
This is one of your best posts so far.
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