2007年10月3日 星期三
10/3
It has been a long time since I went home last time because I am too busy to go home. Finally, I went home yesterday. And my older sister came back from China, too. My parents were really happy and my father prepared one of my favorite foods is beef noodles. We ate the dinner and drank some beer. I talked about my school life and my sister talked something about China. The harmony in home really relaxes me as if the home is heaven. I think I can make up my mind to quit the job and go home once a week to companion with my parents.
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In your first sentence, you don't need "since last time", and you should say "because I've been too busy".
"and my father prepared one of my favorite foods is beef noodles" jams two sentences together. It should be either "and my father prepared one of my favorite foods, (which is) beef noodles" or "and my father prepared beef noodles, (which is) one of my favorite foods".
You can't used "talked" when you mean "said": this is a usage problem. Your sister talked about China or she said something about China. Those are two two idiomatic usages.
"The harmony at home" is idiomatic. And you should probably should say "It makes me feel as if I were in Heaven".
That last sentence needs work too: "I think I might quit my part-time job so that I can go home once a week and enjoy being with my parents".
You have written and posted anything for almost three weeks, and you -- and two of your classmates -- skipped the third hour of class without telling me last Monday. Both are no-no's. If you don't produce three 100-word essays a week for the rest of the semester, you will fail this class. If you or your classmates play hooky again like that, you will get a zero for the entire day, even if you were here for the first two hours. You can't just skive off class, you know. You have to have a reason for not attending.
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